Definition essay

Some of my favorite comic books are: Batman, Superman, X-Man, Spiderman, Sin City, and Spawn. There are a lot of comics that I’ve read in the past, but those are the ones that I prefer [KS1] to read. Getting the stories out of the comics, the movie industry made a lot of movies about superheroes and their adventures. [KS2] The Comics are illustrated books supported by text, drawled panels and conversation clouds.

One of the modern comicbooks that everybody has heard about is Superman. He was born as Kal-el on Krypton. His parents sent him from the planet Krypton to hide him on Earth, and Superman uses his alter-ego, Clark Kent, to hide his identity. He pretends to be a journalist that works together with Lois Lane, the woman that he loves. He protects the innocent and fights his rivals. One of the villains that Superman fights against is Lex Luther. He[KS3]  possesses a piece of Kryptonite and that mineral is the only thing that can kill Superman. Bruce[KS4]  Wayne comes from a multimillionaire family. After his parent’s death he promised himself that he would fight the crime in the world and help innocent people. Peter Parker becomes Spiderman after he was bitten by a radioactive spider, and gains the ability to mutate and to have spider skills but human form at the same time. Spiderman wears a costume and he fights crime and some villains like the Green Goblin who want to destroy him. One of the villains that Superman is fighting against is Lax Luther. He possesses a piece of kryptonite and that mineral is the only thing that can kill Superman.[KS5]  Batman’s alter ego doesn’t scare the criminals a lot, so he decides to use a bulletproof costume in a shape of a giant bat and that will help him secure his identity and scare the criminals. [KS6] But this decision of his will not affect very good on the crime fight. [KS7] Some criminals that Batman fights are the Joker, The Riddler, and The Penguin.. X-men is an association of many people with special powers(mutants).  Professor Xavier is the leader of the X-Men and he  established a school for people with supernatural powers. He trains them and teaches them how to control their powers and use them in a good way. Magneto forms the Brotherhood of mMutants and they battle the X-Men. Magneto wants to destroy all of the mankind and set the mutants to rule the world. Wolverine, Storm, Colossus, Nightcrawler, Rogue, Shadowcat, Gambit are all X-men heroes[KS8] .

 The X-men comics and some of the other comics that I’ve mentioned have been adopted into other media, included animated series, video games, commercially movies.[KS9] 

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 [KS1]In a definition essay, you want to avoid “I”

 [KS2]Need to reword: Many of these comics have been made into movies.

 [KS3]Who does this refer to?

 [KS4]If you’re going to go into this much detail, you might want to make each character a different paragraph

 [KS5]Is the same sentence you have earlier

 [KS6]Unclear what you’re saying here

 [KS7]This is also unclear

 [KS8]This paragraph seems very disorganized. I think you need to separate it according to characters.

 [KS9]Not a conclusion, doesn’t sum up the essay